September 2nd, 2020 
I am seeking assistance in a few areas:
1 – overall improvement in the work in accordance with the assessment criteria
2 – strengthening of arguments
3 – increase critiques of points made (should be more analytical)
4 – the discussion section needs a lot of work (I very poorly put the interview results in, but this needs to be consolidated – lose 1000 words, and things can be simplified and just overall improved a lot) – also, add more analysis by connecting it with info from the literary review
5 – concision so that the entire paper is no more than 5500 words
6 – a short 300-500 word conclusion to be written
7 – check for any plagiarism issues
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